Description: In writing we have been given a task to write a story about a picture. We could write it in different ways like a narrative, news report Etc. I choose news report. We had to make up a story that matchs the genre we choose. The motivation came from the picture we were writing about.
Here is the photo:
Here is my story
Big Idea: I have been learning sentences, For example complex sentences. My specific goal is F,A,N,B,O,Y,S What means For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, So. I decied to do FANBOYS as my goal because I am not using it in my writing. After writing this story I went through and added some more detail and impact. I have learnt to add complex sentences for example david scanned the hall looking for the culprit, while addressing the school.
Feedback/feedfoward: I like how you hooked the reader and add impact. Maybe next time you could add more fan boys and maybe complex sentences. -Zara
Evaluation: I think i did a really good job at making it like a news report but I could improve on putting some fanboys into my writing.